Chapter Eleven

The next chapter is posted! Go to Rabbit Stew if you’ve been following along, or to the main Golden Threads page to read some of the earlier chapters. Let me know what you think.

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2 thoughts on “Chapter Eleven”

  1. Thanks for the comments. I agree that I have too many characters, though I didn’t give some of them names, hoping that the reader would know they weren’t very important. But your questions about David are good ones. He’s there in my mind during dinner, but maybe not on the page. I had the year in, thought it extraneous, took it out, then wanted it it, put it in, and finally took it out. 😉 Guess I need something to note that it’s early 19th century.

  2. HI Ann

    As usual, I enjoyed this. But here are some “editing” notes you might want to store away somewhere and get back to when you are in edit mode. (1) I’m not getting a sense of what period I’m in now. (2) There are too many new people in this chapter, if they are not important, you’ll need to ax some of them … the young girl, then the matron (who wasn’t introduced as one), and the old men at dinner etc. Then, you are also presaging Laura’s powerful male teacher and Matthew’s teacher Bethany. (3) Why isn’t Laura asking more questions about them taking David away? And where is he throughout dinner?

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